Soarin was getting old. He could fix that. But should he?
Speedwrite from the Quills and Sofa Wonderbolts Contest
Written for the Wonderbolt's Contest.
CW: Body Horror
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Soarin was getting old. He could fix that. But should he?
Speedwrite from the Quills and Sofa Wonderbolts Contest
Written for the Wonderbolt's Contest.
CW: Body Horror
Preread by The Sleepless Beholder
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Oooh, very nice. MLP lovecraft is an interesting plot
Damn that's creepy.
Honestly, wouldn’t mind if this got expanded
Parasitic immortality is a pretty damn creepy thing.
This was really nice! Just a lot of cool concepts tied together with plain old fear of aging. The portrayals of the founders here was interesting, and Dash's scene was a good way to use her.
Well! When I wondered during my initial comments on your original draft about "what happened next", I definitely didn't expect the part with Soarin unpeeling into a serrated mouth, lol -- it definitely adds a lot of weight to that last flashback conversation between Hurricane and Pansy! (And how very appropriate it would be if, in swearing to prevent the thing's vengeance, they have instead become its vehicle.)
I enjoyed following the interplay between Hurricane/Soarin and Pansy/Spitfire throughout the story, and I think Pansy's arc is particularly compelling -- from the most reluctant out of all of them, to being the one who is telling Hurricane that no, he doesn't get to chicken out and ruin their hard work, not now, not after everything. I also liked how earlier in the story, I wondered if maybe he would decide enough was enough, but by the end it was very clear from how you characterized him that, yeah, Hurricane was always going to make the choice he made; everything else was just trying to assuage his qualms by feeling bad about it.
Good stuff, and I'm glad to see the expanded version now out in the world! :D
Would happily read more of this.
aww that’s convenient! hate to be those guys, tho
hehe love how identifably Mane Six these characters are
ooh, wonder what that will be!
dang sounds like a cool guy
well that is escalating quickly!
well that about tracks
hehe “yes stud” love it
oof the combination of fun celebration and what it is celebrating is disquieting!
aww Soarin’’s pie obsession is supposed to be fun, not a reminder that the only things left of the original Soarin’ are traces of his biological cravings!
oh dang that is certainly a change in personality from the Pansy we once knew! i am guessing generations of doing this has really warped these original ponies’ personalities
oof! and augh love the theme of characters who justify using any means necessary to destroy an evil for the greater good end up being twisted by it and becoming a worse evil
and that confirms it oof. rip original Soarin’ and Spitfire and all the hundreds of other ponies over the centuries
aww love it when characters inadvertently twist the knife when commenting on something else it is always so good
ooh!
dang so Spitfire got dissolved and everypony just assumed she’s super retired?
and augh dang, great touch to give the horrifying description of supplanting right at the end after hinting how monstrous it would be over the course of the story. really makes it hit home just what the original Hearthswarmers have become.
i had no idea what to expect going into this story overall and augh it is such a cool idea i love it! really makes me want to use it in a story myself. it really is an excellent example of one of my favorite themes. thank you for writing!